NaPoWriMo #23

I need to clarify that this is neither autobiographical nor really following the current cool RWP prompt but rather a tanka sketching a scene seen earlier this week as people approached an Army wife:

damn she’s beautiful
sitting there and making friends
eyes laugh with delight
and next to me sidles up
the bar’s consolation prize

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5 responses to “NaPoWriMo #23

  1. Such a brief poem, and such a vivid image. Thanks.

  2. Loved this. Works well in a tanka.

  3. Well written, but ouch!

  4. This is good Jason.
    Pamela

  5. Definitely an ouch. Thanks for the encouraging comments!

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